Revision

First, I need to work on the structure of my paper. I plan to look at articles in the Daily Texan as well as narrative arguments in order to get an idea of how my paper should be structured. Second, my paper needs more evidence. This can be fixed by doing more research and using the evidence I find to sway my audience to agree with my argument. Third, I want to improve the flow of my paper. I think my topic sentences need to be revised so that these sentences refer back to my thesis statement. I will need to work on my mind map or make an outline of my paper so that I am able to focus more directly on my thesis statement.