Revisions

1. Make known who my audience is: Decide whether my argument is more pathos, or logos. Decide between my "economic argument" or my "attack on human lives argument".

2. Smoother transitions between paragraphs: use the worksheet from UWC with the chart of transition words and phrases

3. Add more anaylsis after evidence: talk about what i just stated in more detail because the paper become strictly facts, stats, and quotes and not enough comentary.